Strangetown: Editing a story detail
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strangetomatoI've been thinking through the details of my story that involve Bella Goth, and I realize that I'm going to have to change a small detail. I noticed this earlier, after her first appearance, but I decided to work with what I had done, and try to make it work. I now see that it really doesn't work. I'm talking about the fact that she knows her last name is Goth. That, in itself, would be enough for Pascal to figure it out. Not only because the Goths are a fairly prominent, "old money" family in Pleasantview, but because Pascal and Mortimer are both scientists, and Pascal would have made the connection and looked into it. I've made some comments about him not finding her in the records, since I was going to have it so that it had been removed from the archives, but I don't think he'd even need the records to figure it out. He would have heard of Mortimer.
So consider this a small edit to the story as it stands now. I'm going to need to do this for it to make sense. This doesn't guarantee that the rest will make sense, but my odds are a little better. I'm going to go back and leave out her last name in previous entries for anyone who might be new to it, but this is just for those of you who would remember that small detail (and probably better than I do - I think I may need to read some of it to refresh my memory).
Oh, and the good news is that I think I'm finally getting somewhere with this side of the plot. I've been kinda stuck with it for a while, so I'm hoping this will help me move forward. I had a nice burst of inspiration and wrote what will now likely be the first part of the next chapter (which really could be broken down into a number of chapters, but I'm grouping them together because they all happen at the same time).
So consider this a small edit to the story as it stands now. I'm going to need to do this for it to make sense. This doesn't guarantee that the rest will make sense, but my odds are a little better. I'm going to go back and leave out her last name in previous entries for anyone who might be new to it, but this is just for those of you who would remember that small detail (and probably better than I do - I think I may need to read some of it to refresh my memory).
Oh, and the good news is that I think I'm finally getting somewhere with this side of the plot. I've been kinda stuck with it for a while, so I'm hoping this will help me move forward. I had a nice burst of inspiration and wrote what will now likely be the first part of the next chapter (which really could be broken down into a number of chapters, but I'm grouping them together because they all happen at the same time).
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Date: 2008-12-19 04:53 am (UTC)I was thinking about how she knew her name was Bella Goth the other day, but to me, Strangetown is a long way from everywhere else, and I think I just assumed that he didn't think of Mortimer as being her husband. She had absolutely no memories, and you wouldn't necessarily think of someone that is in your work sphere as being related to someone who has randomly turned up with amnesia.
Especially as he may have never met Mortimer. It might just be someone he cites in papers (Goth, 1979) and so you really wouldn't think of it, especially if Goth isn't an uncommon name. Or Pascal himself may have given her the surname as the first one that came into his head.
Mortimer may not have let people know about his wife being missing too. I like to think it's a government conspiracy and the only people who know she's missing are the ones in Pleasantview who stand to gain, and so might be part of the conspiracy.
Sorry for the horrendously long comment :P I don't mind if you backdate the change, it makes for a more interesting story if you allow yourself to be flexible with some of the details.