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strangetomato) wrote2008-12-17 03:39 pm
strangetomato) wrote2008-12-17 03:39 pm
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Strangetown: Editing a story detail
I've been thinking through the details of my story that involve Bella Goth, and I realize that I'm going to have to change a small detail. I noticed this earlier, after her first appearance, but I decided to work with what I had done, and try to make it work. I now see that it really doesn't work. I'm talking about the fact that she knows her last name is Goth. That, in itself, would be enough for Pascal to figure it out. Not only because the Goths are a fairly prominent, "old money" family in Pleasantview, but because Pascal and Mortimer are both scientists, and Pascal would have made the connection and looked into it. I've made some comments about him not finding her in the records, since I was going to have it so that it had been removed from the archives, but I don't think he'd even need the records to figure it out. He would have heard of Mortimer.
So consider this a small edit to the story as it stands now. I'm going to need to do this for it to make sense. This doesn't guarantee that the rest will make sense, but my odds are a little better. I'm going to go back and leave out her last name in previous entries for anyone who might be new to it, but this is just for those of you who would remember that small detail (and probably better than I do - I think I may need to read some of it to refresh my memory).
Oh, and the good news is that I think I'm finally getting somewhere with this side of the plot. I've been kinda stuck with it for a while, so I'm hoping this will help me move forward. I had a nice burst of inspiration and wrote what will now likely be the first part of the next chapter (which really could be broken down into a number of chapters, but I'm grouping them together because they all happen at the same time).
So consider this a small edit to the story as it stands now. I'm going to need to do this for it to make sense. This doesn't guarantee that the rest will make sense, but my odds are a little better. I'm going to go back and leave out her last name in previous entries for anyone who might be new to it, but this is just for those of you who would remember that small detail (and probably better than I do - I think I may need to read some of it to refresh my memory).
Oh, and the good news is that I think I'm finally getting somewhere with this side of the plot. I've been kinda stuck with it for a while, so I'm hoping this will help me move forward. I had a nice burst of inspiration and wrote what will now likely be the first part of the next chapter (which really could be broken down into a number of chapters, but I'm grouping them together because they all happen at the same time).
I'm sorry, I just think I've ruined your plot.
(Anonymous) 2009-01-06 09:40 pm (UTC)(link)I just got thinking.
I was checking out some of your Strangetown things, and I got to the part where you wrote something like Bella remembering a flash of light but her medical records saying nothing about head damage...
But if Pascal was abducted, wouldn't he have seen a flash of light too?
Re: I'm sorry, I just think I've ruined your plot.
I did intend to hint at the abduction at that point, but not have Pascal find out just yet. The idea was that he was caught up in it being a near-death experience or something like that, and he didn't think about it being related to the aliens. As someone who's studying aliens, though, maybe he should have. I just didn't want to deal with that development at that time, so I was buying time by sending him off on a false lead.
It's mostly just sloppy storytelling, and how I don't really have much of a plan at all.