Strangetown: Editing a story detail

[strangetomato]

I've been thinking through the details of my story that involve Bella Goth, and I realize that I'm going to have to change a small detail. I noticed this earlier, after her first appearance, but I decided to work with what I had done, and try to make it work. I now see that it really doesn't work. I'm talking about the fact that she knows her last name is Goth. That, in itself, would be enough for Pascal to figure it out. Not only because the Goths are a fairly prominent, "old money" family in Pleasantview, but because Pascal and Mortimer are both scientists, and Pascal would have made the connection and looked into it. I've made some comments about him not finding her in the records, since I was going to have it so that it had been removed from the archives, but I don't think he'd even need the records to figure it out. He would have heard of Mortimer.

So consider this a small edit to the story as it stands now. I'm going to need to do this for it to make sense. This doesn't guarantee that the rest will make sense, but my odds are a little better. I'm going to go back and leave out her last name in previous entries for anyone who might be new to it, but this is just for those of you who would remember that small detail (and probably better than I do - I think I may need to read some of it to refresh my memory).

Oh, and the good news is that I think I'm finally getting somewhere with this side of the plot. I've been kinda stuck with it for a while, so I'm hoping this will help me move forward. I had a nice burst of inspiration and wrote what will now likely be the first part of the next chapter (which really could be broken down into a number of chapters, but I'm grouping them together because they all happen at the same time).

Comments

[cindyanne1.livejournal.com]

Consider the memory of me remembering Bella remembering her last name is Goth, now totally forgotten.

*poof*

Crap... did that sentence make any sense at all? :D

And OMG, speaking of Bella plots, did you happen to notice the statue in Belladonna Cove is of Bella? A statue of BELLA in BELLAdonna Cove! Or, if it's not Bella, it's someone who looks just like her? To me, it brought back the rumors of Bella's mother supposedly being a witch from Magic Town back in the days of Sims 1! :D

And yay for inspiration! Now if only there was a way to generate more time... ugh, lol.

[strange-tomato.livejournal.com]

Oh, good. What were you saying? :P

Well, she resembles Bella, I suppose, but I just look at it as a take on the Statue of Liberty, who happens to look like Bella. They seem to stick Bella everywhere, regardless of whether it makes any sense with the story they've set out (they have a lot of irons in the fire, if it all does make sense somehow).

I didn't play Making Magic, so I had no idea about the connection between Bella and witches until you mentioned it (I saw you post on it before). I see that Simgaroop is making an effort to include it in her story, but the whole thing makes my head spin a little. I suppose it's possible to mention that she's a descendant of witches in an offhand manner (sounds like my family - my Nan said my great, great grandmother was a "witch") and keep with the plot I currently have. It doesn't have to be a significant detail. That's probably as far as I'd go with that.

Yeah, I know, but it seems like I lose focus when I do have time. Sometimes it's good to just grab inspiration and produce in thsoe stolen moments.